I had to write a story, speaking of the picture following....
I invented this story :
The man on the floor could have been an old rich man, and he had just got married TO the beautiful young woman on the stairs.
The stunning woman had actually chosen him for his money...
It was X'mas day, and a lot of presents were waiting near the Christmas tree.
The man, who was like a child, began to open his presents.
He had opened one, when he wanted to put wood in the fireplace : he was cold.
But when he stood up, a shadow slipped in his back....
The gunshot killed him directly.
Who was it ?
--> His young wife. She had married him only for his wealth : SINCE she was his wife, she could have the INHERITANCE.
She had chosen Christmas day because she knew he wouldn't pay attention.
So, what do you think about my story ?
3 commentaires:
Ta histoire est très bien. Il n'y a pas beaucoup de corrections. Voila mes corrections.
The man on the floor could have been an old rich man, and he had just got married TO the beautiful young woman on the stairs.
The stunning woman had actually chosen him for his money...
It was X'mas day, and a lot of presents were waiting near the Christmas tree.
The man, who was like a child, began to open his presents.
He had opened one, when he wanted to put wood in the fireplace : he was cold.
But when he stood up, a shadow slipped in his back....
The gunshot killed him directly.
Who was it ?
--> His young wife. She had married him only for his wealth : SINCE she was his wife, she could have the INHERITANCE.
She had chosen Christmas day because she knew he wouldn't pay attention.
Très bien Emilie!
Désolé, Emilie. J'ai pensé que nous avons fais les corrections pour ta histoire. Voila mes trois questions:
1. Did the Man and Women have any children?
2. How did the woman get the gun?
3. What happened after she shot him? Did anyone hear?
My answers :
1) No, they didn't have any children : they had just met... : they didn't have time !!
2) The woman had good friends who were ready for anything for her ....
3) The servant heard noise, and arrived in the room, the young woman wanted to kill her too : she didn't want a witness; but she misfired, and the servant escaped, she alerted the police, etc etc...
Thanks for you work...
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